Excerpt From "Death of Donna Whalen"

I've got a lot of respect for Winter and I think everyone should. It's damn hard writing like people speak or talk and he's got it down to an art. His use of fragments and run on's just add that layer of "human" to the story, even though it's true. He could have just sat down and made five feet of paper into two or three hundred pages of cold fact but he got into peoples head speaks through them. This excerpt isn't terribly different from any of the others I've read or heard but it shows that you can still tell a fantastic descriptive story without using a lot of adjectives, clear direct speech or trying to force feed what something or place looked like into the readers brain. I'm going to start fiddling around with his kind of style. Through the formats and rules out the window and just kind of write.